She had always been an early riser. She liked the feel of the morning light touching her face… It was the cleanse for her mind…She loved watching sunrise. But that morning, something was different… The blankets were too comfortable, and her body seemed to have found that perfect spot on the bed…so when he had called her softly, to go on the morning walk, she muttered something unintelligible and gone back to sleep.
Then the phones were ringing and the doors were banging and her world had turned upside down. He was hit, there was blood everywhere, they had taken him to the hospital…it was a hit and run. She hung up the phone, they had declared him dead. Was this a dream? Was she still sleeping? She did not want to wake.
June 18, 2014 at 3:41 pm
Awesome! Must be in the air…I just downloaded you’d for trying Flash Fiction. Thanks for being brave! Keep on, keep on, writing.
June 18, 2014 at 3:49 pm
Thank you so much for your encouragement…Yes I have written fiction before but this was my first flash fiction, so feed back is greatly appreciated 🙂
June 18, 2014 at 4:11 pm
Oh wowza, I could feel the shocking pain.
June 18, 2014 at 4:12 pm
Thank you so much!… First time trying my hand at this flash fiction, so glad you liked it 🙂
June 18, 2014 at 4:15 pm
I haven’t done flash fiction per se, though I used to have a feature called “7-Sentence Stories”–I might bring that back….or at least post the ones I liked.
June 18, 2014 at 4:16 pm
hey that would be great! I would love to read them 🙂
June 18, 2014 at 4:17 pm
Well okay then, just for you I’ll dig one out of the deep freeze!
June 18, 2014 at 4:21 pm
yay, you are the best! 😀
June 18, 2014 at 4:24 pm
Oh you’ve made me laugh–thanks!!
June 18, 2014 at 4:25 pm
;D
June 18, 2014 at 4:15 pm
Fun, Way to go Neha. Fiction and/ or short stories are on my someday list. 🙂
June 18, 2014 at 4:18 pm
Thank you so much Brad! I hope to read yours when you get to them 🙂
June 18, 2014 at 6:22 pm
I hope so too, which means I actually write them. XD
June 18, 2014 at 6:23 pm
haha I am sure you will 😀
June 18, 2014 at 6:27 pm
LOL
June 18, 2014 at 5:41 pm
I did not see the ending coming. This was definitely a flash of unexpected fear.
June 18, 2014 at 6:06 pm
Yes, it was partly based on something that actually happened which was very sad …Thank you for stopping by 🙂
June 18, 2014 at 6:12 pm
Very tragic, it was a nightmare. Good work Neha! 🙂
June 18, 2014 at 6:14 pm
Thank you so much!
June 18, 2014 at 6:30 pm
it really rattled me.. I went back and read it again just blinking my eyes… cool
June 18, 2014 at 6:35 pm
Thank you the sad part is, part of it is based on a real life story of a family member…
June 18, 2014 at 6:44 pm
This is very challenging to do, with the special number of words and how you were able to keep the tight writing in check! I am not good at this at all! I am so proud of you, my dear! Special story with a sad plot, but well written! Smiles, Robin
June 18, 2014 at 6:49 pm
Thank you so much, this was my first time trying it out so I really appreciate the encouragement 🙂
June 18, 2014 at 8:16 pm
Used to do story in six words until someone told me I was being pretentious, so I stopped. Is there a set number of words for flash fiction? I’m not sure what that is. But I do know I liked the story!
June 18, 2014 at 8:44 pm
Thank you and I do not know if there is a set number of words for flash fiction…if you did it in six words that is amazing! 🙂
June 18, 2014 at 9:42 pm
Not really. just a micro mini poem!
June 18, 2014 at 9:42 pm
aah still, that takes talent 🙂
June 18, 2014 at 10:24 pm
Thank you.
June 18, 2014 at 11:28 pm
Keep the flash fiction up . it was so light and lovely, then wham you went in with a punch to the gut. loved it.
June 19, 2014 at 11:44 am
Thank you so much 🙂 This was my first flash fiction so I appreciate your feedback 🙂
June 19, 2014 at 3:50 am
Lovely….:) Short but definitely sweet.
June 19, 2014 at 9:23 am
Thank you!
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June 25, 2014 at 6:03 am
Well done for your first flash fiction, Neha, keep it up 🙂 I loved he transition from the sleepy, peaceful initial paragraph to the earthshaking outcome, really felt it !
June 25, 2014 at 7:22 am
Thank you so much Robert! 🙂