forgottenmeadows

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First Flash Fiction – She Slept In

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She had always been an early riser. She liked the feel of the morning light touching her face… It was the cleanse for her mind…She loved watching sunrise. But that morning, something was different… The blankets were too comfortable, and her body seemed to have found that perfect spot on the bed…so when he had called her softly, to go on the morning walk, she muttered something unintelligible and gone back to sleep.


Then the phones were ringing and the doors were banging and her world had turned upside down. He was hit, there was blood everywhere, they had taken him to the hospital…it was a hit and run. She hung up the phone, they had declared him dead. Was this a dream? Was she still sleeping? She did not want to wake.

 

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Author: forgottenmeadows

I am a dreamer and a writer who loves to ponder on the words of the soul.

35 thoughts on “First Flash Fiction – She Slept In

  1. Awesome! Must be in the air…I just downloaded you’d for trying Flash Fiction. Thanks for being brave! Keep on, keep on, writing.

  2. Oh wowza, I could feel the shocking pain.

  3. Fun, Way to go Neha. Fiction and/ or short stories are on my someday list. 🙂

  4. I did not see the ending coming. This was definitely a flash of unexpected fear.

  5. Very tragic, it was a nightmare. Good work Neha! 🙂

  6. it really rattled me.. I went back and read it again just blinking my eyes… cool

  7. This is very challenging to do, with the special number of words and how you were able to keep the tight writing in check! I am not good at this at all! I am so proud of you, my dear! Special story with a sad plot, but well written! Smiles, Robin

  8. Used to do story in six words until someone told me I was being pretentious, so I stopped. Is there a set number of words for flash fiction? I’m not sure what that is. But I do know I liked the story!

  9. Keep the flash fiction up . it was so light and lovely, then wham you went in with a punch to the gut. loved it.

  10. Lovely….:) Short but definitely sweet.

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  12. Well done for your first flash fiction, Neha, keep it up 🙂 I loved he transition from the sleepy, peaceful initial paragraph to the earthshaking outcome, really felt it !

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